Saturday, 19 May 2012

I ACHED FOR HIM

Jeremiah was chaffing on
about wheat and how
God got him drunk again

I had sipped cheap blood
I had cuffed my hands
for the first time since figurines

I broke for Him
I ached for Him

I rested my eyes
on a woman’s conduct
that was between business
and causality, coitus longitude

I broke for Him
I ached for her
I ached for Him
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6 comments:

  1. Martin19 May 2012 at 02:21

    "Coitus longitude", what an idea! For me it reads like the eternal fight between seduction and purity.

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  2. bruce dorlova20 May 2012 at 07:29

    this reads so well - the hymn-like refrain, the short lines.

    and between the lines, between "business and causality", in the nexus between christian faith and the reality it en-genders: in these spaces you've made room for worlds...

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  3. Don Yorty21 May 2012 at 07:13

    I enjoyed this. (Checking you out :))Very nice.

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  4. Tracy Crenshaw29 May 2012 at 03:00

    Beautifully written. I could see the man and woman in my mind, with their all too human shortcomings. And the lines "I broke for Him/ I ached for her/ I ached for Him" packed such a punch. It also was interesting that Him was capitalized, while her was not. It made me wonder if there was a greater "Him" that your were breaking for.

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  5. Rob San Miguel3 June 2012 at 18:43

    Succinctly potent

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  6. Graham Nunn22 June 2012 at 18:57

    Have just been reading my way through a good hit of your work and this one... this one keeps pulling me back.

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