Sunday 19 August 2012

SPOTTED CHARITY

Spotted Charity dwells on low
Not keeping time, unaware
Of five-finger discounts

She is bound by blindness
And feels joy and fatigue
At $20 given to a definite junkie

She dwells where Beauty seldom does
But when together, there is a riot
Of peace and cameos
Aureoles vacant

8 comments:

  1. I don't know why society seems to be less charitable in present times - our tolerance levels seem to be at an all time low. Your words made me think: Charity does not dwell with Beauty.

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  2. I read your poem a few times, as I was so struck by some of the wordings..."Spotted Charities" and "She dwell where Beauty seldom does" and "riot of peace and cameos." Much to think about within these words.

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  3. You say so much with so little. My type of poetry.

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  4. I know her. Perhaps too well. But if one must err, doing so on the side of charity rather than parsimony seems right. You provoke thought. Good writers do.

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  5. That word "spotted" is like dubious sun's ray's in winter - fragile but hardly warming. The word also suggests the chance connection of finding a target; it also suggests "unpredictable". So much power in just the first verb-generated adjective! There is a stylish casual tone in the whole poem that implies at one level these are just drifting thoughts, but on another, more deep- seated level, ideas that have been forming over time. Love the capitalised identities suggesting they are polar opposites! A challenging poem!

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  6. I agree that you say so much in so little... that's difficult to do and make it work. Each time I read it I come away with more and it has jump-started my thinking. I like when that happens, when I am stimulated to think about a poem. Well done.

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  7. I like how you weaved the bipolarity together...from Spotted Charity to Beauty to Aureoles vacant.

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  8. It definitely made me think. From aureoles (German: Heiligenschein) it's not far to "scheinheilig" = hypocritical.
    Btw I changed my blog's address to starwatcher521.blogspot.com .

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